New-age celebrities from Instagram and TikTok are more famous for their glamorous lifestyle than their achievements. Does this affect the children who follow them? State your opinion.
Young-age celebrities from Instagram and TikTok are more well-known because of their way of charming life than their achievement. I personally concur with this view to some extent which I will elucidate in the following paragraph.
On the one hand, in my viewpoint, extravagant lifestyles of young celebrities posted on popular social media rarely affect children’s behavior during better parental supervision. Several parents probably take action to minimize how long their children spend their time on social media. Examples can be seen on Instagram features to arrange time spent and supervise children’s online diary that parents may choose to receive its notifications. In addition, peer interaction plays an important role during school age despite the widespread usage of popular social media among the youngsters. Mostly young children with their classmates are engaged in playing outdoor classic games such as hide and seek together with marbles.
On the other hand, we should consider the negative impacts of the platforms on youngsters. First, the lifestyles of famous youngsters damages children’s behaviors which imitate celebrities to buy more and more branded stuff. This habit exacerbates aggressive behavior to impolitely negotiate what they desire to their parents in order to gain public recognition. In addition, perhaps, young-aged people spend approximately nine hours looking at their screen. Researchers showed that this habit not only can reduce concentration and attention to complete academic assignments but also induce the increase in child-myopia sufferers.
To summarize, it seems to me that social media content related with youth’s extravagant lifestyle have more significant drawbacks for youngsters. This influence brings about a child’s demanding behavior and lowers their academic performance. This is as long as parents take a few part of social media supervision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, well, in addition, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7676056338 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98504338845 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647887323944 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8364863253 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.2 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283700059933 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883392284648 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762979730807 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180818001628 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667658665087 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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