The leaders of most organisations tend to be older people. However, some argue that younger people make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people feel that young-age group can perform better leadership skill, while most of presidents in companies are typically seniors. Personally, I opine the same perspective for reasonable point which I will elaborate in the following paragraph.
First of all, it is obvious that junior, in productive age, has high motivation and creativity to manage organizations in the fast-paced world. Indeed Career Guide states that most of young generations are eager to learn and curious about innovative ideas, not only cultivating their professional growth but also fostering better company performance. Furthermore, elderly person has difficulty engaging with the advancement of technology which hardly to meet some workloads. Proven by Sage Journals, old workers may experience age-related brain changes, even vision and hearing impairments, not to mention poor multitasking response in which those hurdles hamper daily work target.
Conversely, this conveys some positives that such age group more likely remains loyal and dedicated to their occupations than the young. According to Parliamentary Library, most of young workers change work scene over times, while the old ones tend to cultivate their work ethic, having been embroiling in effort and hurdles to reach top level positions. Moreover, those who are leader in mature age has been validated with numerous experiences to precisely address problem-solving and decision-making. Regarding that, in Korean companies, senior leaders may use broader brain networks and align it with various perspectives to realise some compelling vision in the future.
To sum up, it seems to me that placing elderly people as a leader is worth implementing for some remarkable benefits, including strong devotion and commitment as well as experienced interpersonal skills. This is as long as they can afford the world dynamic situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the presidents') or simply say ''most presidents''.
Suggestion: most of the presidents; most presidents
... perform better leadership skill, while most of presidents in companies are typically seniors. Per...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
... organizations in the fast-paced world. Indeed Career Guide states that most of young ...
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Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ch top level positions. Moreover, those who are leader in mature age has been validated...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66077738516 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02333939602 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.689045936396 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6102722351 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.5 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4166666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118009195538 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388199292147 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429819693071 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0751163181607 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265381666995 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.47 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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