NOWADAYS PARENTS PUT TOO MUCH PRESSURE ON THEIR CHILDREN TO SUCCEED. WHAT IS THE REASON FOR DOING THIS? IS THIS A NEGATIVE OR POSITIVE DEVELOPMENT?
In today's modern world, parents are inclined to push their children hard to be successful. In my judgement, this is a pessimistic development on grounds of various reasons.
Admittedly, there are multiple purposes why parents impose on their offspring an immense amount of pressure. There is no doubt that every parent expects their children to gain a lucrative job. This can be explained by the fact that in the hypercompetitive jobs markets, companies seem to adjust their standards higher. Therefore, for being recruited for a well-paid career, they must be adept at multiple fields. As a result, parents tend to put a strain on their offspring to give them more opportunities to gain a better vocational career. For example, some children have to attend numerous extra classes at a young age in order to win a seat at top universities. Besides, people claim traditional stereotypes that students who get bad marks at school are failures irrespective of their other talents. For rational reasons, parents put unnecessary pressure on their children.
Controversially, I believe that it should be a negative development so parents should avoid treating their children in this way. This can render children an inhibited cognition. To be more accurate, children who are under pressure for the long-term can gain certain mental diseases such as depression. Therefore, they are not intriguing in academic learning leading to exacerbated problems. For example, they will be nonchalant to attend lessons in school, instead they can be influenced by friends to be involved in criminal activities.
To sum up, there are various core grounds of why parents place a heavy emphasis on children’s success through putting a strain on them. However, this is a negative development owing to rational theses.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 359, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to lead'.
Suggestion: to lead
...are not intriguing in academic learning leading to exacerbated problems. For example, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, so, therefore, well, for example, no doubt, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 10.4138276553 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31010452962 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03489320976 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1071848614 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.6470588235 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8823529412 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308403982632 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110373370753 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767360737458 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200313107401 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167743431406 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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