OUR PERSONALITIES ARE PREDETERMINED AS A RESULT OF OUR GENES BEFORE WE ARE BORN AND THERE IS NOTHING THAT CAN BE DONE TO ALTER OUR CHARACTER TRAITS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE?
There is a widely held perception in many part of the world today that our personalities have been formed before our birth and it is impossible to be changed. While I agree that genes can form the way we behave, I believe that other factors can alter our traits during lifetime.
It is undeniabled that our parents characteristics strongly affect our charater . Firstly, many people’s personalities are directly linked to their family members. This means, they possess it from their parents so their reactions and expressions towards some specific situations are exactly the same as their parents do. More than that, dominant gene which appear in people can affect their young in both positive and negative ways. For example, a recent study by Australian international school revealed that a student is likely to perform well at school if their parents genetically were intelligent and vice versa.
On the other hand, there are several factors that can alter our character traits. First, it is widely believed that the surroundings and environment that people expose to may change the way they behave and express their emotions. This means, when people frequently interact with their friends or co-workers, they can be influenced by each other personalities and alter themselves in order to be suitable with the surrounders. Secondly, undergoing dramatic changes in lives, people can change their character traits. Take Taeyeon, a Kpop idol for instance, who has received numerous hates from antifans after a scandal, has negatively changed herself from an extrovert to an introvert.
In conclusion, although each individual’s personality has developed pre-birth, I still believe that it can be modified by other factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun part seems to be countable; consider using: 'many parts'.
Suggestion: many parts
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...acteristics strongly affect our charater . Firstly, many people’s personalities ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1457.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.336996337 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87971931148 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7707569907 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.076923077 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26006136936 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102854374174 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103517109026 0.0667982634062 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171278859216 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118397441758 0.056905535591 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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