Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on studying and more time on physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It has raised a public concern over the past decades that children should be supported by parents in taking more hours to practice physical activities instead of spending all time on learning. I thoroughly agree with this assertion that parents should urge their children to limit the amount of hours of studying and increase more time on outside activities; and in this essay, I will support my idea with examples.
For a variety of reasons, it would be true that spending less time on studying will still help students obtain grades at school. If children find an effective learning method by themselves, they will be given greater grades by teachers who always support them to spend more and more time on learning. It also means that better grades do not require an exact amount of time which students must spend. Taking Mai Lan Huong who is recognised as one of the best students in Vietnam as an example, in her interview with Lao Dong news, she shared that she has optimized her learning time by concentrating 100% on learning and being not distracted by the notifications of phones or other matters.
Another reason why I support it is that children can take a toll on their health if they do not do any physical activities for a long time. Parents should deeply consider whether their children get better results on learning at the expense of their health. The onus of the more hours on learning of children is on their parents. It is because parents want to be proud of the grades of their sons or/and daughters in a cut-throat competition about high scores. Children need to have more time on physical activities to improve their mental and physical health.
In conclusion, I fully support the view that children should spend more time on activities which force them to have body movements and less time on learning. Although a topic will polarize public opinion, people, especially parents should prime their children’s health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8734939759 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55376928336 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.6954909867 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.461538462 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61538461538 7.06120827912 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449719004451 0.244688304435 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180987297478 0.084324248473 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853748518307 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300233172579 0.151304729494 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653821858419 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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