The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is sometimes argued that the woman’s position has changed remarkably in the last two decades. Some people say that it is a positive innovation; however, others think that it has caused some serious problems for children since they have a lack of attention from their mothers who are being an office-mom. Personally, I strongly disagree with this view.
It is understandable why some believe that married women who spend most of their time working in the office may cause problems related to young people’s behavior. Their rationale is that office-mothers cannot spend enough time for their family and children as they have to leave home early in the morning and only arrive back home at night. As a result, children may face some mental issues as they lack a family bond. For example, children may have depression when they have a mental illness which can affect directly their actions. This brings negative consequences for teenagers as they have a tendency to break the rules and lack discipline. However, I believe that this view is flawed. Juvenile delinquencies come from various factors such as negative awareness, friends. Take friends, for example, children can be induced by friends to act disciplinary or break the rules to satisfy themselves and their friends.
In addition, I am convinced that modernized mothers nowadays can be another source of financial budget contribute to family’s living standards. As a result, they can support their husbands in raising their children. Furthermore, teenagers can improve their ability to live independently when their mothers are not around. For example, immatures are able to be self-aware about housework or homework which they need to finish when their mothers are not at home. As a result, it will be an improvement in the progress of growing for pubescent people.
In conclusion, there are sufficient grounds to believe that office mothers can bring various behavioral issues for younger people. It is my genuine belief that modernized mothers help their children improve their self-awareness.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25981873112 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81576183451 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534743202417 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7005074131 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7222222222 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3888888889 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165330593205 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548332600057 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480154377014 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100892572882 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041084336691 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25981873112 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81576183451 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534743202417 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7005074131 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7222222222 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3888888889 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165330593205 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548332600057 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480154377014 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100892572882 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041084336691 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.