In recent years, the structure of a family and the roles of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?
First, the reason of this phenomenon is due to rapid change in our society.
So, this phenomenon might be able to change financial obligations and roles in families. When there is an increase in family members, they need much more money. So the parents will both get jobs not only the father but also the mother. Therefore they can divide the economic problem and the children will grow up independently. Next, when they age, they will switch the financial obligations from the parents to the sons and daughters. Then the children can take care of the family, when they parents age.
However, we should not overlook drawbacks as well. In fact, as mentioned above, separating the economic problem has in positives and negatives. They both work the children day care or the grandparents when the parents are working. As a result, they will haven’t touched from their parents during grow up. As a result, they wouldn’t spend time with the parents while growing up. Then they will depend on the others, finally their children might not be able to felt about the love of family.
To conclude, there are both positive and negative of this trend However, my perspective that it is more close the below opinion rather than the above on others. Finally, the children might not be able to feel the love of family.
To conclude, there are both positives and negatives of this trend. However, my personal perspective is more close to the negatives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'parent'
Suggestion: parent
... can take care of the family, when they parents age. However, we should not overl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, look, so, then, therefore, well, while, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1217.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 247.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92712550607 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55374782556 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514170040486 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 374.4 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.2484259112 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.5882352941 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5294117647 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0726158863979 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0278262368518 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351342964401 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0516208465744 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227100300826 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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