Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this era, powerful countries always provide developing ones with economic backup, which seems not to improve the situation of the lack of money there. I totally agree that high-income countries should also help the low-income in other fields.
On the one hand, some poor countries may suffer from badly organised policies. The governments there may not know how to take advantages form the money efficiently, then invest on the unneccessary fields. For example, if the authorities in a poor country decide to buid operas with the donated money, this could kill a thousands of starving children and citizens inside. Moreover, the leaders can profit the money secretly to pay for their luxurious lives without any controls. This may lead to a misunderstanding between the donors in the giving countries and in the receiving countries.
On the other hand, if people in the low-income countries are not well-educated, they may surely not know how to improve their lives. For example, a backward patient who is about to die for a severe disease may not want to go to the hospital due to his old-fashioned religions and the lack of technique in the hospitals. However, we can totally change his mind by improving his knowledge about medicine and upgrade the facilities of the hospitals or clinics. Therefore, the support in the other fields such as education and medicine is absolutely essential.
In conclusion, despite the value of money, I still assure that the most efficient support from the rich countries to the poorer ones lies in various fields not only in finance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04980842912 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82637110608 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578544061303 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2536547699 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.833333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230910626445 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840749837616 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616588460429 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140136564263 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537298588786 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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