In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
In many countries, youths are increasingly becoming obese and their health and fitness are deteriorating. This essay will look at the possible reasons for these developments and will suggest solutions to overcome them.
There are two main causes of obesity and the deterioration of physical health. The main reason for obesity and the related adverse health effects can be found in the changing eating patterns of the population. Cooking with fresh ingredients is becoming less popular and many people consume too much fast food or convenience food from supermarkets. But these kinds of food, on average, contain significantly higher amounts of fat and sugar than freshly prepared meals and, therefore, are an important contributing factor to obesity. Secondly, there is a trend that young people are doing less sport in their free time. These sedentary lifestyles are due to the increase in activities like watching TV or surfing the internet.
Solutions to this problem have to start at a very early age. Both parents and the school have to put a high emphasis on explaining to children the importance of a healthy and balanced diet. The role of the school should be primarily to educate children about the merits of a healthy diet and the dangers of unhealthy food. In contrast, parents should provide their children with nutritious, freshly prepared meals and should restrict their consumption of sweets and fast food. In a similar way, early childhood education should also emphasise the benefits of doing good sports. At schools, there should be mandatory sports classes and children should be encouraged to become members of sports clubs.
In summary, the main reasons for obesity and low fitness level are poor nutrition and insufficient physical exercise. The best solutions are for education regarding nutrition as well as forcing and encouraging students to participate in sports.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as for, in contrast, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26072607261 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77801543494 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57095709571 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5448523161 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.625 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144364795109 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482492261213 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357508870803 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.08571814716 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382470869215 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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