In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard on their studies
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?
Nowadays, with the development of technology and economy the students in almost countries must face with a lot of pressure and it make them do not have any leisure time. In my point of view, they have to main pressure, and it is the main cause of this situation. First is parental pressure and the second is competition for university places
Every parent in the world wants to see their children have successful career and do well in school. This mean they expert a invisible pressure on their children to be successful and it make them spend hours each day studying and working. If they are in school age they have to go to school for 8 hours a day and in my country they need to go for extra classes outside the school to improve their studies more and more, when they go home they also need to finish their homework. So they do not have any leisure time to relax or for their hobbies.
The second cause is to reach the higher education system. Today we have so many universities with many of type private universities or local universities. But almost of parents want their children to have a place in famous universities with the high point. This contributes to the pressure on teenagers, since they must work long hours to have any chance of success.
First solution is in parents to make aware of the effect of the pressure they have on their children. They should share more with their children to realize the burden they bear to their children from their pressures and become more empathetic with their children. They should spend and help their children have more leisure time to relax and improve children and parents connection.
Second solution is with government which should invest in the creation of more university places. This could be done by expanding the existing universities or build new ones. This would help to reduce the competition for the place in university, giving teenagers more leisure time to improve their soft skill and their hobbies
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: makes
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
... their children to be successful and it make them spend hours each day studying and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73043478261 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48184332983 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44347826087 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3463523376 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.375 7.06120827912 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196176513572 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843483734124 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428213615457 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127498605392 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261276902563 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.