In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard on their studies.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solution can you suggest?
Schools are the second home for students and focus in educational learning. Nowadays, in some parts of this world, teenagers have a lack of leisure time and are engaged in many duties from their academy. As a consequence, this condition is addressing young people in under pressure, some measures must be taken to tackle this problem by involving all element in our society.
The majority of this problem is caused by the standardization of testing system. The demand from parents which encourage their children to choose a school based on test scores. But this puts pupils under an extreme pressure by testing them intensively and could make them losing a motivation and self-esteem. For example, currently schools are more oriented to have a high score than a high quality, because the higher scores that schools get the more pupils they will get. Furthermore, schools compete one another to obtain the qualified students as well as a tuition fee.
Having said and that, some solutions can be taken to solve this problem. Firstly, schools should take an action and make the positive learning atmosphere. In addition, parents hold a vital role in forming their children’s behavior, they should teach their children to obey law and order in daily activities. Meanwhile, the complete facilities can ease students fulfilling their task such as a library, an internet and a computer laboratory. Finally, a government must select the qualified teacher from the strict process of recruitment, since they have a responsibility to drive a young people in a good manner.
In conclusion, parents and schools should surveillance the young people to prevent them from terrible circumstances whether in a school or a home. Instead, the government must provide systems and facilities which can motivate and develop themselves without being worried.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 595, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... responsibility to drive a young people in a proper manner. In conclusion, parents and schools ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24662162162 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8394119669 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584459459459 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4342207049 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.533333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175315759875 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586273061625 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533234540789 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109207178805 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519407096266 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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