Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which do you think is a better educational system?
As the world progresses, education plays an integral role in human beings that raises awareness for the country’s development. Some academic programs have undergrad studies in just the core disciplines, whereas others suppose that students must gain knowledge from all of the subjects until they graduate. From my perspective, each system has its own merits for pupils and society as well. Having said that, I do believe the first ideas for several reasons, which are based on many aspects of life, and my opinions on the examples will be sustained in the following essay.
First and foremost, learning is a journey of life that never ends, and to get work done effectively, humans have to learn the main subjects that may be useful for higher education and even occupations. According to research from psychological doctors, 15 is the age of rebellion among teenagers due to the adolescent milestone of becoming an adult. Therefore, learning so much might cause mental health problems as well as the fear of studying and putting great stress on students. It is necessary to implement the vital subjects for them to learn for the sake of saving time and balancing their lives between entertainment and school. On the other hand, it can not be denied the advantages that are brought by broadening the knowledge in every sort of subjects such as art-based syllabuses or technological curricula. In this educational system, students may receive more informative knowledge that they can use in their daily lives.
In terms of the best educational teaching methods, the first one is considered the most suitable for children these days. It will provide students with feelings of pleasure and satisfaction because they will have more time to participate in outside activities such as swimming, basketball, football, etc., even though they still have to study the mandatory subjects. Speaking of the younger generation, the reduction of syllabuses allows pupils to avoid suffering stress or some serious disease due to not having burned the midnight oil or meeting the deadline. Therefore, the fewer subjects are taught, the more specific knowledge is gained and the more effective in either teaching or learning.
In conclusion, children at present have a wide range of opportunities to access many new education systems whose aims are similar to leading them to a brighter future and improving their quality of life. From my point of view, I still support the opening statement thanks to its benefits, besides, the government should take it into account for development. Our economic flows will keep up with other countries in the future if this system is applied in schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, whereas, as for, in conclusion, sort of, speaking of, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 1615.20841683 139% => OK
No of words: 435.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15632183908 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7906758288 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 176.041082164 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590804597701 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.6989963574 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.941176471 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5882352941 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235094101282 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675019306948 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510757735294 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137670650273 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331972548413 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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