Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which do you think is a better educational system?
it is thought by some people that students or pupils should focus on one major disciplined subject like science based subjects i.e. Physics, Chemistry, Math, etc at the age of 15. While others think the opposite by focusing on multiple disciplines such as science, business, history, etc before students leave school. Each strategy has its own pros and cons. In the first paragraph I provided some idea why it will be the best choice or clarify a benefit why it is suitable to focus on a certain discipline and in the second paragraph I clarify some idea why it will be fruitful to study multiple disciplines. Finally, I gave my response to support the second paragraph.
The believer of the first ideology thinks that it should be wise to read a certain discipline for students which might be helpful to establish their long-term careers. The students who want to see themselves as future doctor or engineer should develop may read only science related subjects which make them less distracted in the future.
However, the opposer may think that it is crucial to have knowledge of certain disciplines such as business, history along with science-related disciplines which make them realize to understand their core strength in the future.
In my opinion, I prefer the opposite idea more because some students who focus on a few certain disciplined subjects of their family pressure might later realize they are not comfortable with this subject and later they try to move to business or history discipline. it will be easier for them if they were taught some basic knowledge before they left high school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1355.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01851851852 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64850036508 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548148148148 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.0370453948 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.5 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248731000159 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964930397675 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061043928697 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141502046939 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558098888912 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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