Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?
Educational systems vary across the world, with some force students to study focus on certain courses when they reach 15, while others encourage students to study a wide range of learning. From my perspective, both of these educational ways bring several benefits to children; however, my agreement lies with the latter viewpoint.
On the one hand, focusing on some particular subjects can help children a lot in their career path and higher education. To commence with, by concentrating on specific subjects, students can develop deeper understanding and expertise in those areas. This can help them have a strong background knowledge in the subjects related to their intended majors or fields of study. For example, if children want to be a doctor in the future, they will just study some courses that important and relate to this major. As a result, such way of education provides children a direction for educational journey, clearer goals and aspiration for the future which ultimately shape their career path.
However, equipping students with a wide range of subjects is also crucial due to its importance of children’s development and changes. Initially, learning several subjects can broaden children’s knowledge as they can expose to different perspectives and diverse aspects of life. Consequently, it can enhance culture awareness and boost critical thinking and provide children problem-solving skills. A comprehensive education enables students to learn how to analyze information and make connection between different topics, as a result, help them learn to make informed decisions independently. Furthurmore, while studying concentrate on particular sujects make children become proficient in only one major, a broad educational system can provide a flexibility for student to change academic focus if they wish to pursue different career in life.
In conclusion, while I accept that by focusing on specific subjects, children can gain certain benefits in their career path or for their studying in university, I believe that it would be better if students are equipped a wide range of knowledge about all subjects
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 275, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[6]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'strong background knowledge'.
Suggestion: strong background knowledge
...in those areas. This can help them have a strong background knowledge in the subjects related to their intend...
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Line 3, column 849, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ish to pursue different career in life. In conclusion, while I accept that by fo...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46525679758 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99627220984 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552870090634 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.2391623713 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.153846154 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315444612006 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113989145472 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104075446356 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217293990312 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668066115219 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 275, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[6]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'strong background knowledge'.
Suggestion: strong background knowledge
...in those areas. This can help them have a strong background knowledge in the subjects related to their intend...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 849, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ish to pursue different career in life. In conclusion, while I accept that by fo...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46525679758 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99627220984 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552870090634 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.2391623713 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.153846154 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315444612006 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113989145472 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104075446356 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217293990312 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668066115219 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.