Some educationalists say every child should be taught to play musical instrument To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Some educationalists say every child should be taught to play musical instrument.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

For many years expert educationist have always recommended child to play many instruments ,which to develops their social skills and IQ numbers .And honestly I agree with this recommendations the used of instruments ,in the future using the variety of instruments help a lot in their later activities .
There are many reasons to play and learn instrument .firstly , children who played instrument will impress others. This will increases the social ability and help them to make more friend and cath the other eyes.And in the ammount of intelligent children almost 9 out to 10 of them know how to play instrument,so this mean that learning instrument carried a lot of knowledge which will help them smarter. Furthur more in clollege there’s a lot of activites required many instrumet and talent to join in ,those activities give a lot of score for their future occupation.
In addition , playing instrument in front of peoples also help them to gain more brave and ability to deal with the bad situation,i deem that children playing instrument will be more successful in the future. However not many of children want to learn musical instrument because they think it just a waste of time . but stll in my opinion instrument is very fantastic.
In conclutions . play musical instrument bring you calmness , braveness and ability to patient to something higher than normal ,and instrument is a great ways to relive your stresses too. Just live like avicii used to, playing with the hearth.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, honestly, however, so, in addition, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1244.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 246.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05691056911 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77725618686 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589430894309 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.7097082295 49.4020404114 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.222222222 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.01903807615 498% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207144350496 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834503186675 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523738407073 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140076294619 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210314207261 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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