Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that when a nation is alrealdy rich, any additional rise in economic wealth does not make its individuals any happier. I mostly disagree with this notion since it can have some nagative aspect to the citizens. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
At first, the individuals life in some nation is alrealdy rich will be better than people who live in poor country or developing country. However, there are have some dark aspect in that development country such as unemployment, homeless people or society's vices which can solve by the additional increase in economic wealth. Furthermore, by this development governments can address going demand of the citizens like entertainment, medical and education. In addition, the state can use this development to have plan and concentrate in trainning the youngs talent generation who will contribute their ability for the development of nation. For instance, government can build more school, improve education equipment and train the quality of tutor, also they can support university fees for poor teenager who have enough ability, energy and motivation to serve their nation.
However, with some people who are alrealdy wealthy, so a little additional increase in economic wealth of their country will not make them any more satisfied. For example, Bill Gates or Donald Trump who were really rich, their financial can compare with some nation, so just small change in their country's economic can not help them feel more satisfied. Moreover, some state keep this development for their own profit, that trend is really dangerous and create the bad influence to the individuals and their nation.
To conclude, i mostly disagree with that statement as my arguments in this essay. This trend can improve individuals's life, address the going need of citizen and invest more financial in education, but in other aspect it also have some drawback to human. Goverment need to have bright plan to help their more development in the future.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It is argued that when a nation is alrealdy rich, any additional rise in ec...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will analyse this statement in detail. At first, the individuals life in some n...
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Line 2, column 17, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...s statement in detail. At first, the individuals life in some nation is alrealdy rich wi...
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Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... developing country. However, there are have some dark aspect in that development co...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and motivation to serve their nation. However, with some people who are alreal...
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Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ir nation. However, with some people who are alrealdy wealthy, so a little additiona...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to the individuals and their nation. To conclude, i mostly disagree with that...
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Line 4, column 229, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
... education, but in other aspect it also have some drawback to human. Goverment need ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19384615385 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67696905354 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516923076923 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1727483844 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.571428571 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207780559468 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874646469 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106646759963 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15389700139 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814336218403 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It is argued that when a nation is alrealdy rich, any additional rise in ec...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will analyse this statement in detail. At first, the individuals life in some n...
^^
Line 2, column 17, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...s statement in detail. At first, the individuals life in some nation is alrealdy rich wi...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... developing country. However, there are have some dark aspect in that development co...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and motivation to serve their nation. However, with some people who are alreal...
^^
Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ir nation. However, with some people who are alrealdy wealthy, so a little additiona...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to the individuals and their nation. To conclude, i mostly disagree with that...
^^
Line 4, column 229, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
... education, but in other aspect it also have some drawback to human. Goverment need ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19384615385 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67696905354 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516923076923 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1727483844 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.571428571 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207780559468 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874646469 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106646759963 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15389700139 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814336218403 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.