Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Some people believe that a sense of competition in teenagers should be encouraged, but other people advide that the youngs generation who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more helpful individuals. From my point of view, both notions have benefits and drawbacks with each person and each situation. The following essay will analyse these statement in detail.
On the one hand, sense of competition is really significant tournaments, it is the ego of each children, being the mativation, inspiration and determination for improving themselves to contribute their ability to the development of the nation. Furthermore, teenagers can look at their better competitor for learning and trainning themselves. competitor will give children more wonderful experience, interesting information and value knowledge. To illustrate, Lion Messi who is captain of argentina football club the champion of World cup 2022 had lose a plenty of time after this amazing achievement. He has failed before many countries with strong football background such as Germany, France or Spain, but after that he can find where was his team mistake to improve better and get more successful in the future. In addition, a sense of competition will make some children become selfish, aggressive and just live for themselves. this kind of children will lead terrible influence to the social when they grow up.
On ther other hand, co-operate is also hugely important for the teenagers, they can study the lesson, learn the new attraction knowledge and develop togerther. Not only can friends share the happy stories to the teenagers, but also they can advide children the best method to address their problem. Moreover, the talent friend will have effective influence for the youngs generations. The weakness can be trained by their friends, ans also the friend can improve their talents, skills and abilities. On nagative aspect, with some children co-operation can make them become too depend in their friends. this things will brings to the teenagers a plenty of disadvantage such as lazier.
To conclude, by my argument from these essay both views have their own advantages and drawbacks, so parent need to have bright plan to help their children improve themselves for contributing their talent to the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, moreover, really, so, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32417582418 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8301450578 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1676275367 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4117647059 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264661281533 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815052017408 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104158227529 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173839275552 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107293802904 0.056905535591 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.