Some people believe that it is a good idea for older people to work if it is possible for them to do so. Do you agree or disagree
It is suggested that elders should continue pursuing their careers as long as possible. In my opinion, I partly agree with this statement as older people deserve to take a rest after many years they spent on their occupation
On the one hand, it is indeed beneficial for elderly people to keep working as they can not only get rid of being a family burden but also find joy in their workplace. In detail, many elders have to suffer from being disrespected by their children because they are not capable of earning money and hence create a bigger financial pressure. As a result, by maintaining a job they will not have to depend on their children’s money and avoid being in the mentioned situation. Furthermore, staying at home with mundane tasks is probably not a good idea for older adults, however, by going to work they can meet new people and events that make their life become more lively
On the other hand, elders have to be occupied with their job for most of their life, it is time for them to while away and enjoy what they have achieved. It is true that a lot of people work endlessly everyday to earn a living or save up some money for their later life. Therefore, there is no reason why they have to spend their retirement years thriving in that hectic lifestyle, instead, they should have their own moment to let their hair down, look back on what they have done and do whatever they want in order not to feel regretful afterward
To conclude, although it is understandable that elders are increasingly expected to work longer as it helps them to get rid of being a financial burden along with ensuring that they will always have something to do. From my perspective, I still partly agree with this viewpoint, as elders should have their care-free time as they have tried hard for so many years and there is not much time left for them to enjoy their life
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...rue that a lot of people work endlessly everyday to earn a living or save up some money ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, so, still, therefore, while, as a result, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55752212389 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38521797731 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525073746313 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.2975951904 207% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.374881066 49.4020404114 266% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 193.125 106.682146367 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.375 20.7667163134 204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.0 7.06120827912 241% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192783215825 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924520414662 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806176025975 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127706121768 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274740696742 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 13.0946893788 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.77 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.06 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.1190380762 186% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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