Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while
others feel it should be purely optional. Discuss these opposing views and give your own opinion.
You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own
knowledge and experience.
Sport is said to play a crucial role in a child’s school life. Conversely, others believed that it is not compulsory for children to take sport as a part of their school life. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will consider now.
On one hand, one major benefit of sport is that it helps children’s physical development at an important stage. By doing exercise regularly, children’s muscles are strengthened which leads to a development in their height. Furthermore, encouraging youngsters to take up sports will help counteract them from their sedentary lifestyle. If children spend most of their time studying and playing video games, they will possibly suffer from many weight-related diseases such as obesity, high blood cholesterol, and anorexia. Last but not least, supporters of school sports emphasize the importance of team building and sportsmanship in sports such as football, basketball, etc. In fact, many successful people excelled sport at school.
On the other hand, it is said that sports use up time which can be better spent for learning such as reviewing lectures, preparing for exams,… In addition, it is unwise to force children to do what they are not interested in. Instead, they can make use of their spare time to nurture themselves by doing their hobbies, namely, reading books, baking, planting,… These activities might help to identify the characteristics and future careers for youngsters. Finally, some students are not sporty enough and would prefer to stay indoors studying. It is notable, for example, not every Havard students are keen on sports but they still pursue a good education and a bright future ahead.
Overall, I believe that sports should be optional for children. Because they can choose to grow in another way which suits them most. Moreover, I am convinced that the benefits of letting youngsters choose what they want to outweigh the drawbacks.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
... reviewing lectures, preparing for exams,… In addition, it is unwise to force chil...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
... namely, reading books, baking, planting,… These activities might help to identify...
^^
Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sports should be optional for children. Because they can choose to grow in another way ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, then, for example, in addition, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20578778135 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8397508013 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59807073955 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9588963935 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.1875 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202098129826 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773198259182 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916174354738 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135908042181 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458349179695 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
... reviewing lectures, preparing for exams,… In addition, it is unwise to force chil...
^^
Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
... namely, reading books, baking, planting,… These activities might help to identify...
^^
Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sports should be optional for children. Because they can choose to grow in another way ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, then, for example, in addition, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20578778135 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8397508013 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59807073955 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9588963935 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.1875 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202098129826 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773198259182 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916174354738 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135908042181 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458349179695 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.