Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Controversy has been sparked whether tertiary education guarantees a prosperous career or getting employed instantaneously after graduating is more superior. While both arguments are valid to a certain, they both consist of drawbacks along with their benefits.
To begin with, it is believed that when people attend university or any form of tertiary education for a period of time before starting their career, they could end up having a successful career. However, that is not the case for some billionaires such as Bill Gates or Mark Zuckerberg, two richest guys who did not obtain a bachelor’s degree but still manage to build their own empire: Microsoft and Facebook. Getting a job right after school does not equal to failing, since university education is not the only factor that contributes to one’s prosperity. It requires many other elements such as intelligence, public relations, luck, industriousness and so on.
Conversely, people with formal qualifications have more employment opportunities and their potential of getting promoted is higher. Although studying at university or college does not guarantee success, it is considered the most uncomplicated path to a prosperous career. Furthermore, university’s environment supplies students with a massive amount of knowledge, a wider friend circle and an improvement in students’ practical skills. Such skills as interpersonal or teamworking skills can be extremely useful to those who obtain them. Generally speaking, tertiary education is not compulsory, however students should be encouraged to study higher academically to broaden their horizons.
In conclusion, although university education does not promise a prosperous career, students who obtain formal qualifications are certainly more prominent to become successful. Moreover, getting a job immediately after graduation can also bring prosperity to those who give it their best shot.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...or any form of tertiary education for a period of time before starting their career, they coul...
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Line 3, column 51, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
..., people with formal qualifications are have more employment opportunities and have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69655172414 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21431104306 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6035060684 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.076923077 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220952115025 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724775917 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548314754111 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129092112613 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179329128349 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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