Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In today’s modern world, a part of the society opines that the most effective way to better career is finding work upon graduating from tertiary education, whereas the remaining think that it is best to work right after school. Although there is indeed a small proportion of college dropouts who have successful careers, I personally lean towards the latter view that academic education plays a crucial role in a person’s career path.
It seems evident that the accomplishment of some world's famous billionaires who skipped academics to start their own business is one of the reasons why people have a tendency to get a job right after high school. Microsoft Corporation built by Bill Gates and Facebook built by Mark Zuckerberg are the two most concrete examples today when it comes to not going to college but still having great achievements in life. We can admit that finding work immediately after high school can help those people to gain practical hands-on experience and polish skills related to their chosen profession instead of mere theoretical knowledge from textbooks, which are the primary references provided in universities. However, stories of these high-talented individuals led a small segment of young people to make them misunderstand that knowledge taught in college is not as essential as working experiences. As a result, a majority of them can not find a true job since they still do not know how to determine the right type of job when there is no one to guide them at that time.
However, the acquisition of a tertiary degree today has great significance as it can give us a variety of benefits in our life. When you embark on formal university education, not only you can build a huge network of friends and like-minded people, but you can also gain a great deal of knowledge. Moreover, at university or college, you also can gain knowledge when you do the teamwork by discussing case-studies with peers, which is considered immensely beneficial later in your careers. Also, there is no doubt that when employers need to face hundreds of applications, it is easier for job seekers to be noticed by employers if employees have the relevant college qualification or diplomas. These social relationships could benefit you in furthering your career in the long-term policy.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that completing higher studies is an imperative determinant of one's future career success, and strongly advocate that students should not drop out midway during their studies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...studies is an imperative determinant of ones future career success, and strongly adv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, whereas, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 413.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10411622276 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89399632386 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588377723971 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.6487938572 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.153846154 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7692307692 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212047702942 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643205281065 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349305742671 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113898457268 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144573050152 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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