Some people believe that technology has made our lives too complex and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, people have differing views about whether advanced technology is complicating our life or not. It is true that technology is one factor that leaves plenty of influences in human developing life. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the view that supports the former idea and my reasons will be analysed in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, since the continuous development of automation technology, it is irrefutable that the unemployment rate has dramatically increased. In many industrial factories, robotics and artificial intelligence are used to serve most of the process of manufacturing. As a result, the work efficiency would be improved and the profits that enterprises gain will apparently rocket. However, it should not be forgotten that if most of the procedures are done under robot hands, there will be a serious deficiency of jobs for humans, which lead to the increasing rate of unemployment and the disturbance in economy and even politics.
Secondly, with the popularity of mobile phones and other digital products, I am concerned about the downgrading of users’ physical health quality. Numerous studies have consistently found that light from computers and phones can negatively weaken our eyesight and cause a large number of eye diseases. It is obviously a consequence of the over-time exposure to digital products; therefore our eyes cannot handle working for such a long and continuous period of time. Apart from that, the virtual world seems to be too attractive to young people and it unintentionally prevents them from a healthy lifestyle. For instance, children now are getting used to spending too much time on video games and social media. Consequently, when the penny dropped, they will find putting down these entertaining methods is a matter, and the reduction in outdoor activities has been already formed, which resulted in the physical incomplete development.
Last but not least, it goes without saying that cybercrime has become a controversial issue. Hackers, which refers to a group of people who have fluent internet technology and tend to break into and trouble others’ private online space, can easily invade users’ privacy, then publish them or threaten the victim for property. In addition, it is perilous for adolescents to participate in social networking too early, due to their emotional immaturity. There is quite a lot of offensive and questionable content on these unofficial networks. To cite an example, the illegal promotion for violent products or pornography appears frequently on public websites, and lead to the mis-understanding awareness and cause some behaviours which against the law. Furthermore, teenagers can have to face psychological problems in their online relationships. Some recent study show that body shaming and negative comments on social media impacts youth and give rise to high suicide rate.
In conclusion, technology has a variety of drawbacks that should be focused on and considered to improve, especially websites’ security and balancing the employment systems. There is ample evidence that it is high time we managed time and leisure activities on social networks to minimize consequences.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...egatively weaken our eyesight and cause a large number of eye diseases. It is obviously a consequ...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... working for such a long and continuous period of time. Apart from that, the virtual world see...
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Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considered improving'.
Suggestion: considered improving
...drawbacks that should be focused on and considered to improve, especially websites’ security and bala...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, apart from, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2713.0 1615.20841683 168% => OK
No of words: 501.0 315.596192385 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41516966068 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06656730637 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 176.041082164 174% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610778443114 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 861.3 506.74238477 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3648841187 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.318181818 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7727272727 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128984156837 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319831599872 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387781157177 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684758194665 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503111518366 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 78.4519038076 218% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.