Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In the modern world, replacing leisure activities by using technological devices has gained in popularity. Regarding this matter, it is argued that museums and galleries are not necessary because of seeing works of art by a computer. Personally, I partly agree with this statement for various reasons.
There are advantages of watching historical pictures and photographs with a computer. It is a convenient and economical way for enabling people to be viewers at home. Specifically, they can no longer allocate much time to traveling , which creates more chances for people being preoccupied with their work. Moreover, they can save their money on travel or entrance fees. Consequently, virtual tours to museums are beneficial to those who are financially unstable including students.
However, museums and art galleries serve as indispensable means of entertainment. First, visiting exhibitions of paintings can engender an empirical sense. In other words, direct observation can give people factual feelings about aspects of pictures and objects thereby developing an appreciation for the artists. Second, museums are symbolic destinations of a region or a country. accordingly, they will be ideal places attracting foreign tourists, which can have a substantial impact on profits on the tourism industry of that area. Therefore, museums and art galleries offer benefits to both individuals and society.
To conclude, while the advancement of technology can bring about convenience and money saving, museums and galleries also have influence on the experience of people and the economy. It is highly recommended that the government should organize more exhibitions in different regions so as to facilitate participation of local people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, as to, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67175572519 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13260452668 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652671755725 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9729102689 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.875 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.375 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323334160681 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088294762831 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652355100383 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173421977155 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562269061824 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.31 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.4 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.