Some people say that devoting one’s time to family activities is more important than spending time working. Others believe that dedicating one’s time to work is more important.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
While societies have rapidly developed, people tend to get involved with work nowadays. It is a common belief that the time a person spends working is more beneficial than the time they spend interacting with their family. However, there is a more persuasive argument that quality time with one’s family is more imperative than ever before as both individuals and families are far happier when they have more time together.
On the one hand, working plays a vital role in a family’s financial wellbeing. There are lots of expenditures, such as the daily living expenses or kids' schooling fees, which make a burden on workers. If they don't spend time working, they may not earn enough money to make ends meet. In addition, by working, people may set aside money in preparation for unexpected situations. It is very common for people who suddenly get sick to find that they need money to afford treatment. Thus, it is crucial that people prioritize working to get a budget in case of emergencies.
Nevertheless, spending time with one’s family is more valuable since it has significantly contributed to individuals' and families' happiness. First of all, unlike being stressed in the workplace, people taking part in family activities are more relaxed and fun. For instance, they get rid of the negative emotions that place them under job pressure while playing sports, such as football with kids. Furthermore, if a person spends time with their family, the bonding between them is more likely to boost. This leads to family members not only getting a more practical emotional attachment but also inferring to be happy in the long term. According to a recent study, 85% of workers spending more time on family have a better family relationship than the others who solely focus on work. This demonstrates the essential importance of engaging people to join the family workouts.
To sum up, while it is apparent that time used for working is sometimes more important than family time, it is undeniable that taking time for family is generally more imperative than ever before and should be a top priority.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01988636364 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68029949054 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542613636364 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.688144186 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.941176471 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432660538484 0.244688304435 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140079209178 0.084324248473 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112081183644 0.0667982634062 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294749426354 0.151304729494 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0965521585365 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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