Some people say that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others believe that old people’s life nowadays is much better than in the past.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people claim that becoming more aged in today’s world is absolutely negative, while others think that the quality of life of the seniors within society is far positive than it was in the old days. From my perspective, I concur with the second view.
Advocates of the first view may state that the primary issue hugely impacting the living standard of the elderly is various forms of pollution these days. Contrary to the past, the atmosphere nowadays, particularly in sprawling cities, are heavily contaminated. Toxic fumes from vehicles and factories are mostly the main factor, which makes the aged susceptible to health problems. Besides, water sources are increasingly contaminated as well, including waterways in the countryside. Fishes and other aquatic creatures, as a consequence, absorb the hazardous substances over time. If the seafoods are consumed by the aged people, then they would be seriously poisoned.
Having said that, others and I think that the life quality of the seniors nowadays are far superior to it used to be for many reasons. One reason is the healthcare system. The overall well-being of the aged individuals in society has been remarkably uplifted by technological breakthroughs. Age-related ailments are presently averted and easily treated when the state-of-art medical care is accessible, which leads to longer life expectancy and active lives. Furthermore, the healthcare services are on the top level. Patients are attentively cared by compassionate doctors and nurses, making the atmosphere at the hospital cozy a great deal. Before surgeries, medical instruments are sterilized and medical equipment is prepared in a flawless fashion. After the operations, the patients are well concerned regardless of minor or major injuries. Another reason is a robust economic foundation. This is because pension schemes are enormously supported by the government, guaranteeing financial security for the aged in community. Besides, donors from sponsors and organizations also occupy a large proportion of the financial aid packages. As such, there is every likelihood that a standard of living with necessary amenities would be maintained during years of retirement.
In summary, while some people claim that aging in this modern era is a negative experience, others and I believe this is far better than the past. If any country focuses solely on the medical system as well as financial base for the seniors, then the aging would be a gratifying experience.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 731, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a flawless fashion" with adverb for "flawless"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...lized and medical equipment is prepared in a flawless fashion. After the operations, the patients are...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, then, well, while, i think, in fact, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 13.1623246493 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40512820513 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97954896445 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8481622294 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8181818182 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136673596464 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297201960563 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624770788389 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104349043951 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074720988083 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 78.4519038076 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 731, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a flawless fashion" with adverb for "flawless"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...lized and medical equipment is prepared in a flawless fashion. After the operations, the patients are...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, then, well, while, i think, in fact, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 13.1623246493 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40512820513 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97954896445 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8481622294 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8181818182 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136673596464 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297201960563 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624770788389 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104349043951 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074720988083 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 78.4519038076 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.