Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child’s education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Living the information age, some individuals reckon that educating physical classes plays an indispensable role in a child’s life. However, others argue that concentrating on academics during the whole time in school is more prominent for their children. In my opinion, I suppose that integrating physics and study is the best for every child’s development.
On the one hand, a growing body of research suggests that physical education classes play an integral role in every child’s improvement. This means that if schools successfully balance between physical lessons and academic lessons children can become all-rounded individuals in the future. Not only do physical lessons build their physical well-being but they also unwind children’s minds after academic lessons. Taking developed countries such as America as an example, the governments and authorities exert to change children’s schedules and add more physical lessons into their timetable to boost children’s health. Because they suppose that if children improve their physics, they can entail the development of studying academic lessons.
On the other hand, some people are worried about their children’s marks so they do not enable their children to join in too many physical classes. Their children are likely to become stress and burn out because they do not have enough abilities to maintain numerous academic lessons everyday without exercise. This case is likely to cause in Asia families because they have a notion which means that if they learn a lot of lessons related to academics in a lot of days, they can have the capacity to study well. Therefore, parents usually tend to force their children to learn during many hours to get as good grades as possible in academic classes. Besides that, those who just focus on studying can lead in the monopoly in their class because the only thing they can do is to study. When compared two methods between two cultures in Asia and Europe, everyone can see clearly the results which two thoughts bring to their children.
In conclusion, although children should focus on learning academic classes during their study, it does not mean that they do not do anything, except for studying. On balance, I suppose that children should become comprehensive individuals which can balance between both sides in the future in lieu of just studying only academic lessons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, therefore, well, except for, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29658792651 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6921074449 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509186351706 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.413999047 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 126.125 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8125 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173774927024 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742044524789 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571200936011 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142615858572 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.086266975652 0.056905535591 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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