Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others, however, believe that is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, cultural tour is becoming pervading among tourists. However, whether it is a positive trend or not remains a controversial issue. While I admit that utilizing cultural conventions to attract more tourists and make some money can to some extent prevent it from vanishing, I believe there are still better ways to protect our traditions.
On the one had, we have to admit that it helps to attract more public awareness. Since some traditions have already been neglected due to the rapid development of modern society, we have to take steps to hook more audiences on cultural traditions. In this way, they can be known and remembered by the public. Moreover, financial profits gained can also help to develop or maintain a certain local convention. A good example is the Lion Dancing in China -- a conventional folk dance which has been promoted by performances with charges.
On the other hand, it can also bring detrimental effect. The cultural conventions are frequently adapted to satisfy and cater to the taste of modern people to maximize their profits. A potential danger is that gradually theses traditions will become simply products of modern demands of entertainment, which is merely another form of disappearance.
Meanwhile, to better protect the traditions, other reliable measures should be taken. Initially, it is the government that should take the biggest responsibility. Laws should be released; Students should be inculcated with the concept of various conventions and a consciousness to prevent them from being destroyed. Ultimately, efforts from other parts of the society are also pivotal. For instance, entrepreneurs can set off funds or social activities to offer a support; Social medias should put more focus on the traditions ignored.
By way of conclusion, although making cultural traditions profitable attractions can save them from some respect, the potential danger should by no means be ignored and there are certainly more reliable ways for this. In fact, it is imperative for us to combine powers of all sectors of the society to save our precious conventions.
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.208556149733 0.247107183377 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.189839572193 0.155533422707 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0989304812834 0.0946595960268 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0508021390374 0.0501214627716 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0454545454545 0.0437548338989 104% => OK
Prepositions: 0.101604278075 0.122226691241 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0534759358289 0.0403226058552 133% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.97464387692 2.80594681477 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0454545454545 0.0326793684256 139% => OK
Particles: 0.00267379679144 0.00163938923432 163% => OK
Determiners: 0.0855614973262 0.0861772015684 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0347593582888 0.021408717616 162% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00802139037433 0.011925033212 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2112.0 1933.35771543 109% => OK
No of words: 337.0 316.048096192 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.26706231454 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.40059347181 0.374742101984 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.317507418398 0.28420135186 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.228486646884 0.203846283523 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151335311573 0.137316102897 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97464387692 2.80594681477 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.037074148 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578635014837 0.56093040696 103% => OK
Word variations: 64.7827508001 60.7387585426 107% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0891783567 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.7222222222 20.7743622355 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0056686064 49.517814964 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.333333333 127.492653851 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.7743622355 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.814263465372 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 50.472964062 49.1944974215 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.27102803738 1.69124875643 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280732169309 0.332605444948 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0858130606795 0.102741220458 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0876485576632 0.0668466124924 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.498243224837 0.534860350844 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135431551488 0.148594505496 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980383196824 0.134430193775 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530051530561 0.0742795772207 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.298917498682 0.324371583561 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0396332466349 0.0638462369009 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181252384134 0.228012699653 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244958881319 0.058150111329 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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