Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?
It is assumed that the most indispensable advantage of being wealthy is possessing the capability of assisting other individuals. From my perspective,
I partly agree with this statement.
On the one hand, it is tangible that first and foremost, affluent people are significantly able to benefit themselves. Initially, the more wealth they generate, the more options and opportunities of occupation emerge. These selections and chances are often of higher quality and bring them potential profits in developing their career paths. Besides, the privileged tend to have better health conditions than the general population because they have unlimited access to healthy food choices and fitness training that is not always available to the other social classes.
On the other hand, helping others does play a pivotal role in being rich. This is derived from the fact that in most cases, a wealthy individual accumulates their property from the public. For example, people such as Steve Jobs and Charles Wong attain prosperity by having people splurging money on their products. As a result, they should spend a number of their legacies on taking care of citizens such as donating to charities. This action may upgrade the living conditions and income of the majority. Then the customers will have more budget to purchase their items, which serve their purpose of making profits. Such a cycle is an imperative attribute to running lucrative businesses. Meanwhile, some kind-hearted millionaires make comprehensive impacts in various aspects such as creating more jobs, giving radical solutions to the environment in poor areas. For example, The Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation, founded by one of the most affluent self-made billionaires, has joined hands with many technicians, scientists, and social activists to conduct research and seek methods to eradicate diarrhea in third-world countries.
In conclusion, being rich can not only devote to social but also personal aspects. However, the more important thing about being wealthy is to lend a hand to others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ndispensable advantage of being wealthy is possessing the capability of assisting other indiv...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... other individuals. From my perspective, I partly agree with this statement. O...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, third, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38505747126 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84040448463 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623563218391 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6211462607 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6315789474 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3157894737 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362916426188 0.244688304435 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108149345445 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172924050769 0.0667982634062 259% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243466656708 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.309811191048 0.056905535591 544% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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