Some people think that offenders should be put in prison. Others, however, believe that providing offenders with education and training is more effective than putting them in prison.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are some strong opinions about whether to provide criminals with rehabilitation rather than imprison them. I will discuss both views in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, providing education and training is suitable for those who commit minor crimes such as shoplifting or pickpocketing. Because they are who do not have money in order to meet their basic needs, they commit minor crimes such as shoplifting or pickpocketing. After receiving the punishment, they can have rehabilitation programs to improve what they did wrong. Moreover, when they finish this, they can get a job to earn money. For example, according to a recent survey conducted by the National University of Vietnam, 65% of minor crimes compensate for victims and get a job to meet their basic needs.
Secondly, serious crimes such as robbery or murder, they must be imprison. Because their behavior affects the security of society. And they must be responsible for their behavior. If they do not receive punishment, it will become too unfair to the victims. The victims will live with the harm caused by serious crimes. This will affect the social order when serious criminals do not receive proper punishment. This poses a serious threat to society. For instance, the economic researcher of the ABS University of Vietnam did some research about 70% of people living in the city fear when the big criminals have not been jailed. To address the problem, serious crimes receive the punishment of imprisonment.
In conclusion, it seems evident that both views have their own unique advantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...bbery or murder, they must be imprison. Because their behavior affects the security of ...
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...rsity of Vietnam did some research about 70% of people living in the city fear wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24015748031 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77955265318 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55905511811 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.437144184 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.2941176471 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9411764706 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0865757111805 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339746919035 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486711170677 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893799303429 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754548934699 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.52 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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