Some people think personal happiness is closely related to economic success while others believe that it depends on other factors Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people think personal happiness is closely related to economic success, while others believe that it depends on other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People have different view about the key element of happiness in life. Although some people may argue that personal happiness rely on wealth, I believe that other aspects is also vital for personal happiness.

There are several reasons why people might think that economic prosperity has a directly influence on happiness. The basic human needs, such as shelter, clothing, and food, are all compulsory for each person and can only be afforded with money. Without money, a person can hardly lead a life of satisfaction as these basic necessities make life worth living. Moreover, people who achieve economic success have the financial capability to fulfill their desires and buy things which give them pleasure. They are not confined to any boundaries while purchasing items of interests such as luxurious villa, fashionable costume, and delicious dishes made by famous chef. There is no doubt that economic success play an important role on personal happiness.

However, I believe that abundance of wealth only cannot guarantee happiness. Other aspects such as health and family relationship also have vital impacts on happiness. A healthy man can enjoy appealing lifestyle and has more tendencies to participate various activities which could be a source of joy for him. Some rich but disabled people may feel frustrated when looking others enjoy the fun of water sports that they want to take part. In addition, healthy relations among family members and social circle make people happier and relax. For example, children feel more happiness when playing with their friends or when receiving toys that not even worth a lot of money.

In conclusion, wealth is closely linked to personal happiness, but I recognize that money would not be the only factor determines a person’s happiness.

Votes
Average: 9.5 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('directly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('influence') instead of another adjective.
...ight think that economic prosperity has a directly influence on happiness. The basic human needs, su...
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Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...ly lead a life of satisfaction as these basic necessities make life worth living. Moreover, peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2787456446 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63048895293 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620209059233 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.9014137436 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246037612041 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771055420311 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595214867755 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151542872382 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070936830535 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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