Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete
become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People have various views about whether youngsters should be encouraged to be competitive or co-operative. While a sense of competition can be of use in some situations, I do concur with the idea that adolescents should learn how to co-operate with others.
On the one hand, it is understandable why people advocate competitiveness in the young’s characteristic. The key rationale is that children have tendency to see competitiveness as a source of motivation and, therefore, they will try their best to knock out the rivals. For example, teachers often hold some games in their lessons to introduce a spirit of competition into students’ studying, which makes contribution to their concentration and effort to be outstanding. Moreover, it is obvious that youngsters are capable of being conscious of independence and boosting their self-confidence via the healthy rivalry because that goes a long way for them to show their performances. Finally, the confidence and their abilities give them a careful preparation for the competitive lives and career prospects in the long term, such as job interviews or job markets.
On the other hand, I do believe that co-operation is more significant for children to succeed in the future. Firstly, adolescents with a sense of co-operation tend to broaden their horizon through listening and learning from excellent peers to become the better version of themselves. Furthermore, team collaboration skills are of profound importance for the youth to land a decent job and climb the career ladder in the future. In workplace, it is undeniable that they are expected to work in teams, have abilities in supervising and supporting. In addition to that, working together helps them to facilitate more close-knit relationships with other people, which has a positive effect on their lives after.
In conclusion, while a sense of competition brings adolescents many benefits, it seems to me that co-operative attitude is more desirable in the adult life.
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- Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged Others believe that children who are taught to co operate rather than compete become more useful adults Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... positive effect on their lives after. In conclusion, while a sense of competitio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33968253968 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30362269372 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9003063295 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.384615385 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245063547587 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874466554706 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758352084478 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158921873277 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646090391678 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.