Some people think women should be given the same opportunity to work and excel just like men Others believe that a woman s responsibility should be limited to looking after children and housework What is your opinion Use relevant details and examples to s

It is agreed that women should better stay at home taking care of the family rather than working outside. In fact, this makes us have an ideology that housework is for female and earning money is for male, so I completely disagree.
First and foremost, both genders have equal qualities which are essential for bringing up their children. For instance, they can support each other when educating their childrens some necessary skills. In addition, if only women look after the children, they will able to gradually be looked down. This can lead to their psychological health not being good and affect the cohesion of the family.
Furthermore, a woman who goes out to work will have opportunities to gain a lot of experience not only in work but also in raising children. Moreover, they can earn more money for their family thereby improving their quality of life. So they can become financially independent without depending on men.
In conclusion, I believe that taking care of the family is the responsibility of both women and men. Besides that, women should also focus on their careers and social relationships.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... but also in raising children. Moreover, they can earn more money for their famil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 934.0 1615.20841683 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 187.0 315.596192385 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99465240642 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69140724668 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 176.041082164 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.652406417112 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 290.7 506.74238477 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.6015195327 49.4020404114 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.9090909091 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2727272727 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193774945236 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740811478806 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538399355452 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114579634799 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035255846507 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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