Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both view and give your own opinion
People’s opinions differ as to whether or not some colleges want pupils to study other additional subjects to support their main subjects. While there are strong arguments against the importance to focus on their main majors, I still believe that studying further subjects is an unnecessary aspect of education.
A main reason explains why many people might argue that additional majors are essential is because studying further subjects have a beneficial impact on their career prospects. By studying additional programs, students can acquire a wide range of knowledge from multiple fields which can be a competitive advantage when compares with other competitors in the job market after they graduate. For example, a student that possesses two qualifications in sciences and economics will engross recruiters in appointing for a profession.
In spite of the above comments, I support the view that further qualifications are no longer necessary. Pursuing other subjects has an adverse bearing on educational outcomes. Pupils that study other subjects to support their main majors are regularly they have inclined to get exhausted as they have to distribute their time to study in different curriculums at the same time, a poor results would be caused. For instance, if a student feels tired because of overloaded study in two parallel subjects, it will take a toll on their well-being and leads to terrible consequences in educational outcomes such as terrible grades or depression in school. Instead of studying with that trend, I reckon it is better for students to concentrate on a specific major, they can spend their full time deep researching and consolidating their knowledgable foundation, which will improve their grades as well as have in-depth knowledge in a particular field.
In conclusion, additional subjects certainly have their own benefits but I reckon that their drawbacks outweigh them in the long term.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
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Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'result'?
Suggestion: result
...nt curriculums at the same time, a poor results would be caused. For instance, if a stu...
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Line 5, column 781, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... a specific major, they can spend their full time deep researching and consolidating thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39933993399 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95467103565 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.862042312 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.727272727 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5454545455 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2727272727 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372505235652 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14773637212 0.084324248473 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730471548637 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242279018837 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618399471574 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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