There are several factors that motivate people to stay in the workforce, and money
is the most important factor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Humanity's history is going through one of its hard phases right now, the Covid pandemic, and the war between Russia and Ukraine,...These events postpone the growth of economics and make the unemployment rate higher than ever. In addition, people are now struggling to keep their position at their job. But why would people struggle so hard to stay in the workforce? In my opinion, although numerous factors keep people stay in the workforce, the major reason is still for making an income.
On the one hand, It is true that a huge number of factors can be considered for motivating people to stay. First and foremost, it is because they love what they are doing. Although this job doesn't bring back a decent income, people still have a passion for doing it and they still feel fulfilled every day. Not only that, people also wish to bring “value” to the development of society. They work hard on projects and publicize them to the world without asking for any profits. Despite not being the majority of the workforce, their nobility will always be remembered.
On the other hand, It is undeniable that money is the number one factor that keeps people working. Firstly, money helps us maintain our needs. From eating, drinking, and a nice place to sleep, to higher needs such as a vacation, a television, healthcare, etc. … .All those essential needs can't be fulfilled without the appearance of money, especially in the world of economics. Secondly, money gives us freedom. For many people, they don't work because they like that job, but they still do it so that they can nurture their hobby. Especially in the environment of an Asian country, where you have to take care of not only yourself but also your family, people can’t freely do what they want unless they have a lot of money.
Finally, money is considered to be proof of success in the modern days. People who have a lot of money go in an expensive car or travel around the world. They are admired by many people and they are the inspiration for many others to work hard. Consequently, money brings us the attention and respect that many people wish to have.
In conclusion, the motivation for staying in the workforce can vary for each person, however, I strongly agree that the most important factor is money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 397.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7556675063 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52252382966 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546599496222 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0120428673 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8181818182 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0454545455 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68181818182 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254371129423 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761774555787 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793079729321 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166087886379 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084146687173 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.