Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowdays, we can appear a dip influence of commercial advertising instead of focusing real need in daily life.but what is the most effective method for dealing with the problem.For many people famous consumer goods illustrate advertising equally with precise demand .I completely agree with the opinion of question statement that consumer commodities reflect the power of inaccrate and brodcasting commercials altercation of the actual needs of the society.I will support my view with examples.
Firstly, familar commercial products allways emphesise their upgraded things in their advertisement .I often have this opinion because plainliness people allaways encouraged to buy improved marchendise rather than previous one. but interesting point is that those people can comfortably make consumption or do their work without having the latest one.for example .I can use my current key bord for all of my typing.I do not need any upgraded key board to do my work .but key board company is continiously forcing to purchase a new one through advertising.If i do this it will be entirely dissipate of my money then make me dullard.
one the other hand, if someone can not understand which marchendise or product he need for his require work as a resuly advertising power will obviously helpfull for this person.Take oldest people as an example.they can not adapt with the modern varitie of product and overcome this confusion with the help of regular advertisement.
Another reason why i agree with the view is that people have to utilize their whole earning.people especially personnels, lower class and middle income wage commited that theit expenditure might not be out of their bound.but advertisement power enforce them to by exorbitant things and eventully shove people economically danger condition.We can use industry labour life as an instance.At the edge of the month they can not manage money in proper way becaue they spent too much because of the brainwash of advertisement power.
In conclusion allthough it is a common belief that advertisement sometimes help people.I believe, extra advertisemnt and their businees outlook to the candor people is merely a problem for our society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36994219653 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99602128492 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609826589595 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 20.2975951904 281% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 123.553969314 49.4020404114 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 309.666666667 106.682146367 290% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.6666666667 20.7667163134 278% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.1666666667 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.01903807615 558% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160496692371 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762208464442 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524904525594 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087281124793 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507208600764 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.7 13.0946893788 250% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 5.16 50.2224549098 10% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.7 11.3001002004 236% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.75 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.21 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.8 10.1190380762 245% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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