Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time on sports. Why? Is it a positive or negative development?
The advancement of technology has created a major shift in many children’s lifestyles these days. more and more children video games by smart devices, and do less exercise. this essay will outline the reasons behind this situation and I believe that the drawbacks outweigh the merits.
The main cause of this trend stem from the influence of the media, and the common of mobile phones. Firstly, there are a plethora of games from various platforms, which suit different people all of the ages. consequently, children can easily be drawn their attention to these games, and waste their time with such activities. Secondly, parents today are more and more swamped with tons of work, so they tend to allow their kids to access computers at an early age. as a result, children are addicted to interesting gameplay and beautiful graphics of video games. they are willing to splurge plenty of time exploring the world of games and neglecting their studies. besides, playing games without perception will have a negative impact on their health, such as bad eyesight and more seriously making them suffer from depression. this can affect the growth of children.
In contrast, the more they spend hours on playing games, the less they engage in social activities. Due to the fact, doing exercise apparently takes a lot of time and demands patience from the praticers, so children are not keen on enjoying exercise lessons. This is the case of children who despite playing outside, always stick to games on their phones. In other words, more sport and exercise facilities are just springing up in urban areas, making it harder for others to stay physically active. Some remote areas still experience a severe lack of facilities and equipment for people to participate in sport and exercise. That is why the cases of the youth suffering from obesity and cardiovascular on the rise. This is often the case of children who despite playing outside, just stick to the phone’s screen without joining in the daily conversation.
In conclusion, despite video games are a great way for children to entertain themselves, however, we as citizens should find out the reasons behind the mentioned trend and take steps to solve this urgent problem.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05945945946 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5941215785 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559459459459 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6520662612 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5263157895 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4736842105 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26315789474 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226639001726 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612390466077 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351214379834 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115994232219 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511359657194 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: More
... many children’s lifestyles these days. more and more children video games by smart ...
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Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...y smart devices, and do less exercise. this essay will outline the reasons behind t...
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Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... platforms, which suit different people all of the ages. consequently, children can easily...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Consequently
... suit different people all of the ages. consequently, children can easily be drawn their att...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...s to access computers at an early age. as a result, children are addicted to inte...
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Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... and beautiful graphics of video games. they are willing to splurge plenty of time e...
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Line 3, column 668, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...of games and neglecting their studies. besides, playing games without perception will ...
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Suggestion: This
...ly making them suffer from depression. this can affect the growth of children. ...
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Line 5, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he growth of children. In contrast, the more they spend hours on playing gam...
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Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... more they spend hours on playing games, the less they engage in social activitie...
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Line 7, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ildren to entertain themselves, however, we as citizens should find out the reaso...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ke steps to solve this urgent problem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05945945946 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5941215785 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559459459459 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6520662612 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5263157895 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4736842105 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26315789474 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226639001726 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612390466077 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351214379834 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115994232219 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511359657194 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.