Today people are surrounded by advertisement. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A study shows the characteristics a person is born with have a far greater influence on his personality and development than any experience he may have in his life.
I think the character that is brought from birth is the main influence in personality and development in life this is because every human being is born character from both parents is always inherited through genes to children. so that among us sometimes it is not uncommon to see someone sometimes has a personality like a male parent or mother. For example, there is someone who has a friendly and loving personality, while his parents, namely his mother, has a friendly personality and his father is loving. then in development in the environment, for example, we have a personality that is able to withstand pressure while our parents are ex-military.
However, experience also has an impact on personality and development cause experience is the result of learning and adaptation in the environment. Although experience is not too dominant to have an impact on personality and development, for example, financial management behavior that previously someone did not have experience with finance. Howeveless because they are already in a work environment and learn about finance and gain experience counting large amounts of money so that it has an impact on one's personality.
In conclusion, experience is not the most important thing that affects a person in life, but the characteristics from birth are the most dominant to influence a person's personality and development in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, while, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1319.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23412698413 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17827912177 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503968253968 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.6243381817 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.555555556 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0326082990146 0.244688304435 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0156652083511 0.084324248473 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0150968714136 0.0667982634062 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0216486127188 0.151304729494 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0143000500989 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.