TOPIC :
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world , subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
* This is the first time I've written an IELTS WRITING TASK 2. Hope you guys give me my band score for this essay and some advice for the next time. Thank you so much! *
In the eyes of some people, History is one of the most necessary school subjects. Otherwise, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History in today's world. In fact, both these views have a great deal of true points.
First and foremost, we know History is one of the most important school subjects now. In History,we have learnt about legendary heroes, who fighted for peach and independence. Famous revolutions, dynasties have been learnt in History. History likes a bridge , which connect young generation to the past. Besides students learn about History, they also focus on good qualites from
ancestor, such as honesty, respect ,kind,... That's the reason why History is known as the most important school subjects. We can't deny the important of History in our life.
Secondly , Science and Technology are compulsory subjects at school. We learn about theory, numbers and statisty. When you want to apply for a scolarship to study abroad, you have to do a test which called SAT. It's a test for Math skills, so Science is really important. If you want to study oversea and work with modern technology, you must study Technology well. They are help us develop our mind and get a bright future. If you study well two subjects, you will establish positive energy in your brain and you will become more active in some difficult circumstances.
In conclusion, both these views are true. We learn History for our soul , to keep our memories from the past. Besides, we learn Science and Technology for our brain, to get more knowledge. Both these views are true and we should follow them to improve ourshelf in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86581469649 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46418312813 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571884984026 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7218325513 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.2173913043 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6086956522 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04347826087 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289654729676 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884037233525 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113495253125 0.0667982634062 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173642649255 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144195067744 0.056905535591 253% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 50.2224549098 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.3001002004 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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