The use of mobile phones has increased dramatically in recent years.
What are the positive and negative effects of this trend?
In a technologically-driven world, people are living in the Fourth Industrial Revolution, which leads to the ubiquity of smartphone users, such a household name. Whilst some people suppose this as a huge forward step in today’s fast-changing industrialization, others believe that the development of smartphones is probably thorny. From my point of view, there are, admittedly, some problems with this issue, but I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of the increase of smartphones.
One of the undeniable problem of excess use of smartphone is that some people are more prone to several health problems. Utilizing electronic devices, particularly smartphones, poses a threats directly on people’s health from the amount of radiation they release towards users. Especially, according to numerous studies, sightless and cardiovascular problems, the consequences of using smartphones excessively, are problems that almost all experts over the world can not find the solution to these issue.
However, the bright sides of the development of smartphones which bring to society are totally useful and crucial.It is worth noticing that it assists people with searching information, texting with friends immediately and blurring the distance between family members. In previous hundreds of years, people encountered a barrage of difficulties and challenges in their daily lives. However, with the existence of smartphones ,all these issues are completely solved. In addition, with smartphones, the leaders of countries can debate with each other without going far. For instance, the government makes a decision to spend an amount of money ( 1 billion dollars ) to create apps and stock exchanges to aid the understanding and economic growth of the country.
In conclusion, although the increase of smartphones causes certain problems, I am convinced that smartphones can bring more benefits to society than it could be imagined in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69965870307 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28980497997 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62457337884 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8516360493 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.166666667 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0533105040632 0.244688304435 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0196489089916 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0225572229728 0.0667982634062 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0345921083314 0.151304729494 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154990194742 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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