Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Juvenile delinquency has been becoming an ever-increasingly prevalent cause of concern for people around the world. Consequently, some people opine that they should be punished equally as adults. I advocate this opinion because only in this way could the retribution achieve its functions effectively.
The unfairness in punishment between children and adults negatively impacts one of the principal functions of retribution: reducing the crime rate. Harsh punishment, including long-term imprisonment or even the death penalty, works as a powerful deterrent to potential criminal offenders, leading to a lower crime rate. If the law treats teenagers differently as it does to adults, normally more leniently, the youth will be less likely to be afraid of the consequences of committing a serious crime, which promotes juvenile delinquency and raises the crime rate. A widely known example of this phenomenon is that an increasing number of juveniles are charged with rape in countries where children under a particular age shoulder no criminal responsibility. Given the listed reason and example, it is reasonable to sentence teenager offenders in the same way as adults from the perspective of reducing crime rates.
Also, compared with long-term imprisonment, a more lenient penalty might weaken the function of protecting innocent people. When a criminal has committed a severe crime, he should indeed be kept in prison for a long period in order to separate him from innocent people. This separation decreases the risk of potential offences because citizens are less likely to encounter those criminals who might re-offend. However, if teenager offenders receive lighter sentences or alternative punishment, such as community service, this kind of protection will become less effective because those criminals who have not been fully rehabilitated yet can still meet and do harm to citizens. Consequently, a lenient punishment will make it less effective in terms of protecting innocent people.
On balance, to reduce the crime rate and protect innocent people effectively, fairness in punishment is a must.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...ople opine that they should be punished equally as adults. I advocate this opinion because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, still, kind of, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55108359133 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08316544984 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603715170279 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8671773054 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.071428571 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190996009364 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656974955418 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050332140017 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115571468681 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225934980272 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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