Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the age of crime is getting younger and younger, especially teenagers. This raises the question of whether the methods of re-education for juvenile delinquents are an outdated and no longer deterrent. Some argue that the government should impose the same punishment on teenagers as adults. In my opinion, I disagree with this statement.
To begin, most young people commit crimes due to impulsiveness and lack of thought. Adolescents are mentally unstable, easily agitated, do not know how to manage emotions and behaviors, which leads to criminal actions. For example, incidents of violence are most often caused by small frictions between friends or participating in theft to express themselves in a word of defiance. In addition, it can be seen that children who commit crimes are children who lack attention from their families. A child may choose the most negative method of seeking parental attention through rebelliousness. Some children believe that their more rebellious actions such as fighting or stealing will attract more attention, and this is more like a cry for help from the child than a criminal act. Therefore, applying punishment such as imprisonment or some other harsher method of punishment will be counterproductive, the fragile nature of the child will be hurt, making the situation worse and lead to more severe consequences and uncontrollable behavior. Moreover, if punishing minors as adults, in the case of a student being bullied by a peer by blaming the theft not only has great consequences for the entire family of the bullied student but also causes inequality in society.
However, applying the same fines could reduce the juvenile crime rate immediately. If the punishment is not deterrent enough, it is easy for young people to feel fearless, continue to repeat, and from small mistakes can lead to bigger mistakes such as drug trafficking, kidnapping, murder. . Meanwhile, severe punishment will make children think more carefully before doing and reduce recidivism, making society more stable. But in the end, heavy or light punishment is not as important as self-awareness and self-correction, instead of severely punishing children who commit crimes, they should educate them to understand that.
In conclusion, juvenile criminals should not be punished as adults. The law always has leniency and if acts of impulsiveness at a young age have to be paid with the future, that price is too expensive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31876606684 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02538134479 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568123393316 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8399429715 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.944444444 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.9879759519 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225574809417 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687802097849 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513836132394 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133247915903 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301405433464 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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