In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
What are your options on this?
There is ongoing debate regarding children taking part in various types of earning activities. Majority of individual admit this as inapplicable, while other conceive this as acquirements of practical knowledge for taking load. The argument consist of dual viewpoint regarding the children taking part in earning activities. Prior to my opinion both the views are discussed further.
Highlighting the former view, the most relevant argument that supporters put forward is that by this they became stronger to face any difficulties. This is because, by doing any kind of work to earn they encounter with various kind of people and learn about the mentality of individual. Apart from this, they learn art and culture. This convey that, most of the children who use to earn are working in field which are related to are & culture for example acting which enhance their abilities. Moreover, they also learn about the moral value by meeting different kind of people.
However, latter view cannot be overlooked, the latter view has its own justification. The strongest protest is, it encourage child trafficking. By this I mean due to this trend there is a risk of increase in child kidnapping and child labouring as child are paid more than adults. Beside this, effect on their academic career. For example, as children devote most of their time for earning money rather than investing this time for study which affect their future and they are unable to compete with other student of the same age. To sum up, they have less knowledge about the cutting edge technology which are really important for them.
To conclude, despite people having different views, I would clearly support the latter view. as due to this there is a risk of child trafficking and it also affect regular study of the children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to art', 'to be'
Suggestion: to art; to be
...individual. Apart from this, they learn art and culture. This convey that, most of ...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...s convey that, most of the children who use to earn are working in field which are ...
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Message: Did you mean 'encourages'?
Suggestion: encourages
...ification. The strongest protest is, it encourage child trafficking. By this I mean due t...
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Suggestion: As
... would clearly support the latter view. as due to this there is a risk of child tr...
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Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...a risk of child trafficking and it also affect regular study of the children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, moreover, really, regarding, so, while, apart from, for example, i mean, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04697986577 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57723504326 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563758389262 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2361953042 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4705882353 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257490077554 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792370983555 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576168624614 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150391453692 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047011356682 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.