More and more young children have mobile phones. Some people say it is a good
thing for them, while others say it is a bad thing What is your opinion?
We live in an age where mobile phones have significantly reduced the distance
between people. As the worlds progress the need and use of technology will be
increased as well. People have expressed their views pertaining to young children
having mobile. I have highlighted some points in response to this view.
Adolescence mind is an unprotected, which can be influenced by what they sense.
Though negative ideas may not influence them initially, it can influence them after
per-found exposure. These negative ideas can make them take up terrorism, resort
to violent actions, usage of drugs, viewing unwanted sites and much more. In order
to counteract this if parents could impart adequate knowledge and perception as to
the abhorrent nature of various fields, young adults can be safe and can also
influence their friends to do so. For Instance, my parents had shown how alcohol and
drug usage changes a person and reduces the life span which has kept me away
from them till now.
Despite warning from parents’ kids may tend to visit some sites. Mobile has a feature
where parents can track their kids through their phone. When young adults are
aware that parents can track what their mobile, they will defiantly refrain from visiting
such sites. Parents can block inappropriate sites also. This is a boon with countless
advantages. Example, a kid from my neighborhood went missing, police were able to
track the kid through the mobile location in their parents mobile. So, technology is a
boon for parents.
Mobile is a positive tool for parents to have control aver their children and guide
them when required as they have shared their knowledge and tracked their mobile
usage.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ve significantly reduced the distance between people. As the worlds progress the need...
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...he need and use of technology will be increased as well. People have expressed their vi...
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...ir views pertaining to young children having mobile. I have highlighted some points ...
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Suggestion: Per-found
...nitially, it can influence them after per-found exposure. These negative ideas can make...
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Suggestion: To
...n make them take up terrorism, resort to violent actions, usage of drugs, viewin...
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Suggestion: Influence
...young adults can be safe and can also influence their friends to do so. For Instance, m...
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Suggestion: From
... the life span which has kept me away from them till now. Despite warning from p...
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Suggestion: Where
...isit some sites. Mobile has a feature where parents can track their kids through th...
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...isit some sites. Mobile has a feature where parents can track their kids through th...
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...n track their kids through their phone. When young adults are aware that parents c...
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Suggestion: Such
... will defiantly refrain from visiting such sites. Parents can block inappropriate ...
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Suggestion: as well
.... Parents can block inappropriate sites also. This is a boon with countless advant...
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Suggestion: Advantages
...s also. This is a boon with countless advantages. Example, a kid from my neighborhood we...
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Suggestion: Track
...ood went missing, police were able to track the kid through the mobile location in ...
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Suggestion: Boon
...r parents mobile. So, technology is a boon for parents. Mobile is a positive too...
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Suggestion: Then
...control aver their children and guide them when required as they have shared their...
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Suggestion: Usage
...ir knowledge and tracked their mobile usage.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, well, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51420454414 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603571428571 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.454294164 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4705882353 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4705882353 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.58823529412 7.06120827912 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153336950325 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051197544704 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047093078355 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0473030231336 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044087800819 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.