In some countries, older people who retire from work spend the money on themselves (e.g.holiday) rather than save money for their children. Is this a positive or negative development?
There is a trend in some countries that elderly people prefer spending their savings on themselves rather than leaving them for their children. In my own perspective, this phenomenon has more advantages than disadvantages.
There is no denying that parents always care about their children in every aspects, including finance. In some Eastern countries, it is kind of a tradition that parents would like to save money they earn on their daily living and keep them for their children, especially then they are old and retired. Children would make use of this fund in some significant events in their own lives such as wedding and purchasing houses. Such a big financial source could dramatically help their children improve the quality of life.
However, reserving a large number of money for their children could easily enhance their idleness in pursuing an independent life with their own effort. In China, more and more children nowadays are not willing to do their best and fight for a decent life all by themselves, since they could count on the savings from their parents. This is not a beneficial development for both the children themselves and the society.
On the other hand, with the money they save in hands, old people could enjoy a better life after retirement by purchasing whatever they want and visit wherever they like. In Western countries, a certain amount of people are willing to use their savings to travel everywhere around the country or even around the world as a reward for the busy and hard work through out their lives.
In addition, it is well known that elderly people are easier to get injuries or illnesses and it could significantly cost a huge amount of money seeing doctors, taking medicines or even having surgeries. Therefore, old people could be more confident against disease with sufficient savings for themselves.
In spite of the fact that it might be a culture for elderly people to saving money for their children in some countries, it could possibly make their children lazier to work on their own. In contrast, it has more positive effects for them to spend the money on themselves. They could enjoy a wonderful life after retirement and get better prepared for potential threat from sickness or illness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, therefore, well, in addition, in contrast, kind of, such as, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 378.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5741488431 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497354497354 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1509620606 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.125 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.625 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416360278996 0.244688304435 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151535813087 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919870747756 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241918783076 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884705591862 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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