Some people say taxes should be spent on health care. Other people say that there are more important priorities for tax-payers’ money. Discus both these views and give your own opinion.
The money that people are paying as tax is one of the revenues of each government that can be spent on a wide range of purposes. While many people believe this money should be allocated to development of health care system, others think that there are more important issues to take as priorities for spending this money. Despite all benefits that a modern health care system will bring with, I would argue that there are many others crucial issue that are as important as health care.
To begin with, it is an undeniable fact that an up-to date health care system which is equipped with cutting-edge technological advancements such as modern facilities or novel medicine, play a pivotal role in providing both public welfare and creating a well-being society. The importance of having such a system would be more for either elderly people or disabled individuals. Take European countries as an illustrative examples, where a high proportion of population is above 60 and certainly need health care services. Unless having an enough facilities, the rate of fatal would increase significantly.
By contrast, however, while statistics are not exact and can be refuted, there seems convincing evidence that other factors such as education, city’s construction, and adequate job opportunities, although indirectly, have immediate impacts on development of a society. If we take this view that these parameters are able to influence the health situation of citizens, it is logical to suggest that the money which is accumulate from taxes should be diverted into these fields. For example, launching a factory would create numerous job opportunities for people who are seeking for permanent job. Also, lack of well-educated workforce, in long term, result in less productive industry and declined social benefits.
In conclusion, based on aforementioned explanations, I would argue that the money of taxes should be allocated equally to the health care system and other important issues such as education or job opportunities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31366459627 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98000259953 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.6370692454 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.583333333 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322191515611 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118189170684 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875494373469 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207599802233 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776581605046 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.