Writing task 2Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Working over time become a common phenomenon these days in our society especially in mega cities. Then it seems to be an increasingly widespread concern that overwork is stealing our time for social activities and entertainment. I think while overwork can produce higher efficiency for economy, it may lead to serious health issues in the workplace.
In the past, it was not common for the people to work overtime, but due to the rising population and widespread globalisation, people have to compete with not only the fresh graduates from universities but also the job seekers coming back from overseas. Spending more hours working in an office to impress bosses is the key to secure a decent job. It is true that this trend will bring companies and organizations the benefit to choose the best employees all over the world and boost the productivity, therefore, it will achieve the fast growth of GDP of our society.

It is also true that there are many famous companies have the culture of long working hours. For example, In a TV interview of the CEO of Alibaba Jack Ma, he admitted that one reason of the success of Alibaba was the long working hours culture in this company, and it is also true for some other international giants like HUAWEI and Tencent.

Of course,this culture can cause health problems for employees who continuously work long hours every day.As they sacrifice leisure time to do regular exercise,play sport games and unwind in outdoor activities,they may suffer from physical difficulties such as heart diseases. Moreover, the lack of social activities with family and friends can threaten their relationships and create psychological diseases such as depression. Even though they have made a fortune through hard working,the happiness of being healthy and strong bond with people they love can not be bought by money.

Although it is deemed that the long working hours may bring the high productivity of company and better indicator of GDP. But only the work and life balance could make this growth more sustainable.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i think, of course, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82581249608 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579411764706 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8792075489 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.076923077 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1538461538 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232350995846 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794487777075 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426013155616 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122691384878 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199698373235 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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