Agree or disagree:
Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children's development.
Living in a world filled with various technology and gadgets when they were born, children nowadays spend a lot of their spare time on computers, cellphones, and videogames. Some people may think that children rely on these electronic devices way too much, and they should play simpler toys and go outside rather than staying at home and using technology. However, even though I agree that children should spend a substantial amount of their time outside, I believe that these technologies and gadgets are still really important for them.
Firstly, using technology can help improve children's cooperation and teamwork skills. Nowadays, there are various apps, software programs and video games that help promote cooperation and encourage kids to work together to reach a common goal. For instance, a popular video game named Fortnite can be a great example of video games helping improve children's teamwork skills. Fortnite is a free online video game where kids can play together with their friends and fight their way into being the last one standing. Kids would improve their teamwork and collaboration skills because kids are required to communicate with their teammates in order to win the game. These skills can be transferred to school where students can learn to work with other children. This shows how video games can help make a child's teamwork, collaboration, and communication skills better.
Secondly, allowing kids to use technology now can let them prepare for their future, as jobs nowadays all require a certain level of skill with technology. Kids who learn to type, research, and have an understanding of navigating and fixing online problems can have a real advantage in the workforce. For example, if a college graduate is trying to find a job and has a lot of experience in computers, he would most likely be able to find a job quickly since employers these days would want someone who knew their way around technology. And when he starts working, he will be able to get tasks done much faster in comparison with the people who aren't confident with computers, therefore making him one of the best in the company, thus allowing him to get an even better job. In a nutshell, this shows that using technology at a young age can help you find a better job in the future.
Admittedly, kids who use too much technology will be living an unhealthy lifestyle since they aren't going outside at all. However, parents can easily monitor the time children get to use technology. Only allowing children to have 30 minutes of screen time everyday can give children time to technology and also not stopping them from living a healthy lifestyle.
In conclusion, letting kids use technology not only teaches them teamwork and collaboration but also helps them prepare for their future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2335.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02150537634 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6510259316 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503225806452 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9967466398 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.894736842 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4736842105 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248421620416 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791036379538 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575277421997 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132808432319 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717383126909 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.