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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Government should put higher tax on junk food to reduce consumption.

Nowadays, governments of many countries place a heavy emphasis on health conditions of their residents through different policies or advertisements that arouse people’s awareness of the significance of health. It can not be denied that junk food contains some proteins that is indispensable for our body, providing sufficient energy for us, and such a fact might mislead impressionable people to generate the opinion that rising the tax of junk food will be detrimental for our health. However, this statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies, and it should be examined meticulously. As far as developing people’s healthy habits, the urge for suppliers to transform their production into healthy food and the overall influence of society are concerned, I strongly hold the opinion that the tax of junk food should be elevated by government.

Firstly, increasing the tax of junk food leads people to live a healthy life. With increasing tax of junk food, the overall price of junk food might be appreciated and thus become not affordable for some people. Facing increasingly high price of junk food, they are forced to find something that substitutes junk food in their diets. They might tend to cheaper but healthy food like vegetable soup, brocoli, carrots and other food made of healthy ingredients. As a result, they decrease the demand for junk food and change their diets that involve something more healthier. In this way, they will develop healthy eating habits with less consumption on junk food.

Secondly, rising the tax of junk food by government might urge suppliers to transform their productions. When the tax is increased, both consumers and producers should share the adding part of its price, reducing the producers profits gained from supplying the junk food. Eventually, producers are urged to sell other commodity that can be more profitable. For example, they might grow and farm vegetables, providing themselves an opportunity to make more profits by selling them on the markets. Under this circumstance, the volume of consumers for junk food will decrease, lowering the probability of cancers or other malady.

A voice may arise that wealthy people will still afford junk food even though the price of it is ascending. Thus the policy of putting up price is not effective over the whole society. Ironically, this statement does not hold under scrutinize meticulously. Given the fact that the new price of junk food is not affordable for most people, they will change their consuming behaviors rather than insisting on buying it like opulent people. Considering the whole society, it actually alter most of people eating habits, proving the efficiency of this policy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 559, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...ange their diets that involve something more healthier. In this way, they will develop healthy...
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Line 7, column 57, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to junk'
Suggestion: to junk
...e that wealthy people will still afford junk food even though the price of it is asc...
^^^^
Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...en though the price of it is ascending. Thus the policy of putting up price is not e...
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Line 7, column 482, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'alters'?
Suggestion: alters
...sidering the whole society, it actually alter most of people eating habits, proving t...
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Line 7, column 488, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ng the whole society, it actually alter most of people eating habits, proving the efficiency o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24827586207 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78865261953 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501149425287 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9679372498 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.15 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245191357178 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852844756553 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583943604881 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153061774271 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466355496543 0.0645574589148 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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