Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves.
With the development of technology and the growth of economy, education, especially primary education has been made available for most people in the world. However, the debate on what the ultimate goal of education is has never stopped. Though some people argue that the point of education is to offer people the ability to educate themselves, which is crucial in people's career development, I hold the view that there are other goals of education, like to teach people how to maintain relationships with others and to inspire people to explore the realm of Science, are of the similar importance as the ability to educate themselves is.
Admittedly, one of the most important purpose is to enable people to educate themselves, and in other words, to learn by themselves. It is because the ability of self-learning renders people outstanding. In the era of information explosion, new knowledge is created and circulated every minute. Therefore, only those who learn by themselves everyday can keep up with the pace of the fast-changing world. Jack Ma, for example, created the Alibaba, a giant company of e-commerce with his self-learning skills. In the beginning of 1990s, almost no one really knew where would the Internet lead the realm of business to except Jack Ma. He keenly noticed the potential of the Internet in facilitating daily transactions. Hence, he started to learn every aspect of the Internet without any teachers but just himself. Finally, he founded Alibaba with the knowledge he learned by himself, made Alibaba survived in the fierce competition in China with his knowledge, and became one of the wealthiest people in the world. The ability to educate themselves helps people follow the trend and spot opportunities and hence it is a crucial goal of education.
Even though to equip people with the ability of self-learning makes people successful, the importance of it doesn't make it the most important goal of education. Another goal of education is to inspire people to explore the realm of Science. John Nash, who created the Game Theory and eventually changed the realm of Economics, became interested in Mathematics in his childhood. He was then sent to elite middle school where he received education of high quality that inspired him to explore the world of numbers and formulas. After graduation from Princeton University, he spent days and nights on his work when the only thing which supported him was his passion for Math. Finally, he published his work about the Game Theory and was granted with the laureate of Nobel Price of Economics. If he didn't receive the education that inspire and encourage him to chase his dream in the realm of math, would it still be possible for him to achieve great success in his desired field?
Needless to say, it is an important goal of education to teach people how to learn by themselves. However, there are a lot of goals of education, like to inspire people to devote themselves to science, and clearly the previous one is not the most important one.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ore, only those who learn by themselves everyday can keep up with the pace of the fast-c...
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Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...people successful, the importance of it doesnt make it the most important goal of educ...
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Line 5, column 764, Rule ID: PRICE_PRIZE[3]
Message: Did you mean 'Nobel Prize' (reward)?
Suggestion: Nobel Prize
...ry and was granted with the laureate of Nobel Price of Economics. If he didnt receive the e...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...eate of Nobel Price of Economics. If he didnt receive the education that inspire and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, hence, however, if, really, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2529.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99802371542 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78425674897 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46442687747 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 808.2 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2925377102 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.428571429 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0952380952 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336812822016 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115072240891 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118790757923 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260844410606 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102429128264 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 10.002688172 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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