Some parents offer their school-age children money for each grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

It is a common wish of parents that their children can study hard and achieve outstanding grades in examinations. Therefore, some parents try stimulating their school-age children by granting them money for each excellent grade they gain. Unarguably it is not only a wise and effective way to help students focus on their study but also a precious opportunity for children to learn how to manage their money when they grow up though it seems to be somewhat costly.

The money offered when children perform well in exams stimulate them to study hard and the knowledge they gain from study eventually equip them with skills that render them highly employable. Generally speaking, the famous companies favor graduates who have gained high GPA in schools and universities since they believe those students have learned enough knowledge and will create significant value for the company. For instance, most investment banks, such as Morgan Stanley, Goldman Sachs, and Bank of America, only recruit students with grades better than 90% of their peers. It is not because these companies are particular but just because they would like the candidates to be the best.

What's more, offering money to school-age children can contribute to the education of money management. Nowadays, the financial market has been more advanced than ever in the past and it is necessary for people to learn how to manage their money. On the contrary, those who have no idea about money management may be easily involved in frauds and lose all their savings.

Admittedly, offering children a certain amount of money based on their performance in school is somewhat costly, especially for the parents who has several children and each one of them perform excellently in school. However, the benefits it can bring clearly overweigh the economic expenses it can cause. It is because the money given to children is not like the money spent on impressing dresses and fancy cars. It is more like an investment, which can bring fruitful return if the children become a success 10 or 20 years later because of outstanding grades in school and mastery of money management skills. In that case, the parents may receive a considerable amount of money for retirement from their children and be able to travel around the world and enjoy spectacular scenes of nature.

As the previous discussion has demonstrated, giving money to children for each high mark they get in the final exams brings numerous positive effects. It not only helps children to be an outstanding employee after graduation but also help them learn the money management skills.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09069767442 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62987063905 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518604651163 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.1667961522 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.764705882 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2941176471 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388027945298 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13507896985 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104738604908 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231302892838 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731565406892 0.0645574589148 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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